Tuesday, November 17, 2009

words from a heart



it's 1:34 am
it's cold
cold creeps cautiously covered concretely caressing
can't sleep
my fingers wake up typing unconsciously these words
a frame of you stands shattered in my mind
i wake from my sleeplessness to commute with my mind
there you are
smiling and causing me pain
lit my cigarette
my lungs ache from smoking
but how can i exhale the pain you painted in my heart
we saw that future together
we saw it
i saw it
can't type again
to bed sleepless again
are you sleeping now
i will try to sleep after this stick
it's burning away
my chest aches
my mind aches
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16 comments:

  1. TRYBESNovember 18, 2009 at 12:22 AM

    I cant imagine how many times i feel this way..Nice poem..

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  2. ÁineNovember 18, 2009 at 4:02 AM

    Wow,that was very raw,straight from the heart right? :)

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  3. m1keNovember 18, 2009 at 4:20 AM

    @trybes the pain is real man
    @smiley: real from d heart

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  4. AnonymousNovember 18, 2009 at 4:56 AM

    wow, m1ke, that must be some serious pain. Is it weird that I think I can feel a little of it from the way you right? This is really good.

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  5. AnonymousNovember 18, 2009 at 7:12 AM

    sounds like a lot of pain
    i know this feeling a little too well, but the beautiful way you captured it is awesome...
    in a very sad way
    everythings gonna get better
    take care of u ok?

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  6. KafoNovember 18, 2009 at 7:58 AM

    oh my word
    this is .....
    i have no words

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  7. ChiamakaNovember 18, 2009 at 8:41 AM

    heart breaking poem!

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  8. TatababeNovember 18, 2009 at 9:09 AM

    Wow! I almost feel the pain....I know this might sound like a cliche but everything happens for a reason. It'll get better.

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  9. AdminNovember 18, 2009 at 9:09 AM

    Nice one,well written poem

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  10. The Snarky NarwhalNovember 18, 2009 at 9:40 AM

    Thank you for the comment, I really appreciate it.

    Lovely poem, very deep.

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  11. MyneNovember 18, 2009 at 12:07 PM

    You write very well. Kudos and thanks for the comments on my blog.

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  12. BlogorattiNovember 19, 2009 at 1:08 AM

    ..'my lungs ache from smoking
    but how can i exhale the pain you painted in my heart...
    Liking that part.
    Thanks for dropping by at mine's. Hope to see more of your works.

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  13. histreasureNovember 19, 2009 at 9:18 AM

    raw,heart-wrenching and evokes deep feelings..

    hope you find the strength to move past this point

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  14. AnonymousNovember 19, 2009 at 1:42 PM

    Very beautiful and sad poem!

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  15. muscoNovember 19, 2009 at 1:54 PM

    really words from d heart!

    great piece.

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  16. Nee Fe MiNovember 19, 2009 at 6:48 PM

    awww first time on here and i am wowed - sorry, i hope u feel better soon

    thanks for commenting on my blog

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